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2. Tuhinga Tuatahi na Te Uru Karaka
22.3.12
He tinana nui, roa, whatoro ai, he iti hoki ia ētahi wā.
He mauhoka ōna makawe rino. He karu kāmera. He ihu
paparahi, he ihu kore.He waha ki tō te Hangareka. He
karu wīra. He tinana rino, ara, he tinana ‘tini-rapihi’
tona.
He poturi tana hikoi hitekiteki ai, kia pera ki te hoiho,
ara, te manu hukapapa. He kararehe hukapapa a ia.
He roro koi tona. He nanekoti a ia, kai ai nga mea
katoa. I a ia e kai ana, he ipu para tona waha e huakina
ana pera ki te raiona, horomi ai.
He mihini rupahu.
Tona hoa wahine, he anuanu, pera ki a Meka peka.
E noho ana tenei ki tetahi whenua metara paru, ara, te
Ao Rapihi Rino.

3. Mahinariama nā Te Uru Karaka
26.03.12
I te Ao Rino, i rere mai tētahi waka ātea, tukua iho ai ngā rāpihi. Kei
waenganui aua rāpihi, a Mīhini Whātoro KRRAK1.
He tinana nui, me te roa, whāatoro ai., he He iti hoki ia i ētahi wā. He
tinana rino, arāa, he tinana ‘tini-rāapihi’ tōona. He mauhoka ōna
makawe rino. He karu kāmera. He karu wīra ōna..He ihu paparahi, he
ihu kore. He waha tōna kia pēnā ki tō Hangareka, te hoariri a Tāne
Pekapeka. He karu wīra. He tinana rino, ara, he tinana ‘tini-rapihi’
tona.
He pōoturi tana hīikoi hīitekiteki ai, kia pēerāa ki te hoiho, arāa, te
manu hukapapa. He kararehe hukapapa a ia.
He roro koi tōona. He nanekoti a ia, kai ai ngāa mea katoa o te ao. I a
ia e kai ana, he ipu para tōona waha e huakina ana pēerāa ki te
raiona, horomi ai..
He mīihini rūupahu kia āhei a ia ki te kape i ngā tāngata mīhini.
Ko Ttōona hoa wahine, he anuanu, pēerāa ki a Meka pekaPeka.
E noho ana tēenei hoa wahine ki tēetahi whenua mēetara paru, arāa,
te Ao Rāapihi Rino. Māna tana hoa wahine e whakaora.

4. Mahināriama nā Te Uru Karaka
I te Ao Rino, i rere mai tētahi waka ātea, tuku iho ai ngā rāpihi. Kei
waenganui i aua rāpihi a Mīhini Whātoro KRRAK1.
He tinana nui me te roa e whātoro ai. He iti hoki ia i ētahi wā. He
tinana rino, arā, he tinana ‘tini-rāpihi’ te hanga. He mauhoka ōna
makawe rino. He karu kāmera. He karu wīra ōna.He ihu paparahi, he
ihu kore. He waha tōna kia pērā ki tō Hangareka, te hoariri a Tāne
Pekapeka.
He pōturi tana hīkoi hītekiteki, kia pērā ki te hoiho, arā, te manu
hukapapa. He roro koi tōna. Me he nanekoti a ia, kai ai i ngā mea
katoa o te ao. I a ia e kai ana, he ipu para tōna waha e huakina ana
pērā ki te raiona, horomi ai.He mīhini rūpahu kia āhei a ia ki te kape i
ngā tāngata mīhini.
Ko tōna hoa wahine, he anuanu, pērā ki a Meka Peka. Me mōhio
koutou kei wāhi kē te wahine nei na, kua mauheretia rawatia e tētahi
taipo tūkino. Ko tā Mīhini Whātoro mahi te rere atu ki taua whenua
mētara paru. Māna tana hoa wahine e whakaora.
Tēnā e hoa, karawhiua!